Sample: Scientific Paper Editing

The author gave me permission to post this. She is an authority in this agricultural field, born in China, and so at times in need of editing. This is just a small snippet I could find of the voluminous work we did together.

Researcher’s version, pre-edit: This proposed research is closely tied to the department research priorities. 1. Develop and screen turfgrass for improved turf performances and environmental biotic stresses and develop enviromental sound turfgrass management practice. This project will address drought stress issue and is supposed to provide turfgrass management of genotypes as chosen

My Edit: This proposed research is closely tied to the department research priorities:

1. Develop and screen turfgrass for improved turf performance and environmental biotic stresses, and develop environmentally sound turfgrass management practices. This project will address drought stress issues and proposes to provide turfgrass management of selected genotypes.

Researcher’s version, pre-edit: During a heavy production season nut prices tend to decrease and because of substantial tree stress nuts tend to underfill and are graded to an even lower price – a clearer understanding of how trees fall into the “on (large production) /off (small or no production)” cycle of production will suggest management practices needed to overcome AB and provide more stable year-to-year production scenario:  

My edit: During a heavy production season nut prices tend to decrease. Due to substantial tree stress, nuts tend to underfill and are graded to an even lower price – a clearer understanding of how trees fall into the “on (large production) /off (small or no production)” cycle of production will suggest management practices needed to overcome AB and provide a more stable year-to-year production scenario.